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Writing to present your point of view
时间：2019-09-23 作者： 阅读：
Writing to present your point of view
【情景呈现】
节约能源或资源目前已成为社会共识，但在校园里浪费现象还是比较严重。请你以校英语报记者的身份，根据所给内容提示用英语写一篇150词左右的评论稿。
内容提示：
1. 简述校园浪费现象；
2. 浪费所带来的影响；
3. 如何杜绝浪费。
【写作指导】
一、文体分析
1. 本文是议论文——针对某个社会现象提出见解或主张，以引起某个群体的关注。
2. 正文包含三个方面：现象、影响和主张。
3. 行文时要注意：
（1）紧密围绕主题；
（2）论点和论据之间要有逻辑关系，切忌牵强附会，可借助举例、排比、对比、类比、比喻等各种写作手法增强说服力；
（3）在明确各方责任和义务的前提下提出主张，主张务必合理才更容易让人接受。
二、思路演进
三、语言风暴
请根据所给句子和策略尝试填空（每空一词）。
1. Students tend to take school supplies for granted. The waste of supplies has brought about many negative effects. (运用非谓语动词表示结果,增加前后句的连贯性)
Students tend to take school supplies for granted, _____ / _____ _____ waste. It has brought about many negative effects.
2. The waste of supplies is seen everywhere.
(通过举例使浪费现象具体化，以引起目标读者的共鸣)
The waste of supplies is seen everywhere, _____ _____ throwing paper around, having lights on overnight, and throwing away the remains of a meal.
3. Such behaviour has added to schools’ financial burden and caused pollution.
(运用关联词以突显“后果”的严重程度)
Such behaviour has _____ _____ added to schools’ financial burden, but also caused pollution.
4. The school can involve the whole campus in going green.
(运用短语介词或相关句型突出某一方的责任或义务)
_____ _____ the school, it’s necessary to involve the whole campus in going green.
As far as the school is _____, it’s necessary to involve the whole campus in going green.
5. We can walk or ride a bike to school. (丰富语意以突显关键信息)
We can make it a _____ to walk or ride a bike to school.
We can walk or ride a bike to school _____ _____ taking a car.
6. It’s troublesome to buy cases of water all the time when you go out. But it’s a good idea to use a large reusable water bottle.
(运用比较结构将两句合并，更突显该建议的合理性)
It’s just _____ to go out with one large reusable water bottle, _____ to go out and buy cases of water all the time.
【参考范文】
Students tend to take school supplies for granted and thus the waste of supplies is seen everywhere. For example, classroom lights are left on overnight, taps are kept running and great amounts of plastic packaging are thrown away.
Obviously, such behaviour has brought about negative effects. It has not only added to schools’ financial burden, but also caused pollution. In such a case, should we just stand by?
Absolutely not. As for the school, it’s necessary to involve the whole campus in the effort by sharing ways to live green or running waste-to-energy projects. As teachers, they should lead by example. As far as students are concerned, they can make it a routine to walk or bike to school. In addition, they can reduce waste by turning off water taps and electrical devices when not in use and taking advantage of recyclable things like water bottles.
Only when everyone plays their role can a green campus be created.
【实战演练】
共享单车已深入多个城市，大众只需扫码即可使用，价格低廉，停放位置也不受限制。然而，共享单车不可避免地面临着一些问题。请根据内容提示用英语写一篇150词左右的短文，给校英语报投稿。
内容提示：
1. 共享单车带来的益处；
2. 人为因素带来的影响；
3. 如何妥善利用共享单车。
答案
语言风暴
1. causing; leading to / contributing to
2. such as / for example 3. not only
4. As for; concerned
5. routine / habit; instead of / rather than
6. better / cheaper; than
实战演练
The bike-sharing service gains great popularity across the country, with more companies springing up in the market. It actually provides a convenient, cheap and healthy means of transportation. Meanwhile, it helps decrease the number of cars on the roads, further reducing traffic jams and air pollution.
However, some problems have brought about inconvenience. Some uncivilized people damage shared bikes on purpose. Besides, they’re parked everywhere — at the bus station, on the pavement, under trees, etc., which may get in pedestrians’ way, and cause injury. So the following measures should be taken.
First, companies must establish rules to control such behaviour. Second, local governments should provide strong support for the service. Last but not least, every individual needs to raise awareness of promoting such an eco-friendly service, because we share the responsibility for protecting the earth.
In conclusion, only when local governments, companies and users all play their role, can bike-sharing be sustainable and enjoyable.
【情景呈现】
节约能源或资源目前已成为社会共识，但在校园里浪费现象还是比较严重。请你以校英语报记者的身份，根据所给内容提示用英语写一篇150词左右的评论稿。
内容提示：
1. 简述校园浪费现象；
2. 浪费所带来的影响；
3. 如何杜绝浪费。
【写作指导】
一、文体分析
1. 本文是议论文——针对某个社会现象提出见解或主张，以引起某个群体的关注。
2. 正文包含三个方面：现象、影响和主张。
3. 行文时要注意：
（1）紧密围绕主题；
（2）论点和论据之间要有逻辑关系，切忌牵强附会，可借助举例、排比、对比、类比、比喻等各种写作手法增强说服力；
（3）在明确各方责任和义务的前提下提出主张，主张务必合理才更容易让人接受。
二、思路演进
三、语言风暴请根据所给句子和策略尝试填空（每空一词）。
1. Students tend to take school supplies for granted. The waste of supplies has brought about many negative effects. (运用非谓语动词表示结果,增加前后句的连贯性)
Students tend to take school supplies for granted, _____ / _____ _____ waste. It has brought about many negative effects.
2. The waste of supplies is seen everywhere.
(通过举例使浪费现象具体化，以引起目标读者的共鸣)
The waste of supplies is seen everywhere, _____ _____ throwing paper around, having lights on overnight, and throwing away the remains of a meal.
3. Such behaviour has added to schools’ financial burden and caused pollution.
(运用关联词以突显“后果”的严重程度)
Such behaviour has _____ _____ added to schools’ financial burden, but also caused pollution.
4. The school can involve the whole campus in going green.
(运用短语介词或相关句型突出某一方的责任或义务)
_____ _____ the school, it’s necessary to involve the whole campus in going green.
As far as the school is _____, it’s necessary to involve the whole campus in going green.
5. We can walk or ride a bike to school. (丰富语意以突显关键信息)
We can make it a _____ to walk or ride a bike to school.
We can walk or ride a bike to school _____ _____ taking a car.
6. It’s troublesome to buy cases of water all the time when you go out. But it’s a good idea to use a large reusable water bottle.
(运用比较结构将两句合并，更突显该建议的合理性)
It’s just _____ to go out with one large reusable water bottle, _____ to go out and buy cases of water all the time.
【参考范文】
Students tend to take school supplies for granted and thus the waste of supplies is seen everywhere. For example, classroom lights are left on overnight, taps are kept running and great amounts of plastic packaging are thrown away.
Obviously, such behaviour has brought about negative effects. It has not only added to schools’ financial burden, but also caused pollution. In such a case, should we just stand by?
Absolutely not. As for the school, it’s necessary to involve the whole campus in the effort by sharing ways to live green or running waste-to-energy projects. As teachers, they should lead by example. As far as students are concerned, they can make it a routine to walk or bike to school. In addition, they can reduce waste by turning off water taps and electrical devices when not in use and taking advantage of recyclable things like water bottles.
Only when everyone plays their role can a green campus be created.
【实战演练】
共享单车已深入多个城市，大众只需扫码即可使用，价格低廉，停放位置也不受限制。然而，共享单车不可避免地面临着一些问题。请根据内容提示用英语写一篇150词左右的短文，给校英语报投稿。
内容提示：
1. 共享单车带来的益处；
2. 人为因素带来的影响；
3. 如何妥善利用共享单车。
答案
语言风暴
1. causing; leading to / contributing to
2. such as / for example 3. not only
4. As for; concerned
5. routine / habit; instead of / rather than
6. better / cheaper; than
实战演练
The bike-sharing service gains great popularity across the country, with more companies springing up in the market. It actually provides a convenient, cheap and healthy means of transportation. Meanwhile, it helps decrease the number of cars on the roads, further reducing traffic jams and air pollution.
However, some problems have brought about inconvenience. Some uncivilized people damage shared bikes on purpose. Besides, they’re parked everywhere — at the bus station, on the pavement, under trees, etc., which may get in pedestrians’ way, and cause injury. So the following measures should be taken.
First, companies must establish rules to control such behaviour. Second, local governments should provide strong support for the service. Last but not least, every individual needs to raise awareness of promoting such an eco-friendly service, because we share the responsibility for protecting the earth.
In conclusion, only when local governments, companies and users all play their role, can bike-sharing be sustainable and enjoyable.